I'm having trouble figuring them out. These scenes intro hero and his love interest plus
villain and at least one suspect. This is my 1st attempt to write a murder mystery. What are your
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RENEGADE VAMPIRE
goals, motivation,
& conflicts
new scene list
beginning
1 - Inciting
Incident
Locale: Portland, Oregon – July
4,2011
Vampire kills cop.
POV – Vampire
Goal: to feed his hunger
Motive:
Conflict:
Disaster;
2 - Locale: New Orleans, LA - 1865
POV: Talon
Goal:
Motive:
Conflict:
his uncle, a vampire bites him and his brother Jude turning
them into vampires.
Disaster:
Talon & Jude search for their uncle, but can’t find him.
3 - Locale: San Francisco, CA – July 5, 2011
POV:
Talon
Goal: to keep from getting killed by a vampire
slayer
Motive: so he can go to a meeting with his former
boss
Conflict: the slayer, realizing
he’s no match for Talon, leaves.
4 - POV: Talon
Goal: to
get to Portland
Motive:
to visit his brother Jude who might be in some
sort of trouble. Before
he leaves his former boss has a job for him
which offers a hefty reward.
since he’s going there anyway, he
doesn’t see any harm in making money while there.
Conflict: Just before he leaves
he’s confronted by a loan shark wanting
money he owes her. He uses his abilities to
hypnotize her and
her driver to make them forget he exist.
5 - Locale: Portland – Late That Afternoon
POV:
Homicide Detective Dillon McCain, a mortal
Goal: him and his partner Max Ramos investigate the
death of a pimp
while they interview a young man involved in
the murder Max
catches him ogling the man and makes a
homophobic.
remark.
Motive: to catch the cop killer so he can get
reward.
Conflict: Fed up with the remarks Dillon starts to
punch Max out, but someone
stops it. Max orders him to leave the scene
of the crime.
6 - Locale:
Portland, Same Day After Dusk
POV: Talon
Goal: to visit
his younger brother Jude
Motive: to find out if Jude is actually in some sort
of trouble
Conflict: he’s attacked by slayers
7 - POV:
Dillon
Goal: to
get away from Max and go home to try to relax
Motive: tries to stop his boyfriend from going to
Italy
Conflict: his boyfriend doesn’t want to stay &
leaves
8 - POV: Talon
Goal: he
finds out where Jude lives
Motive: he has a feeling Jude has stopped taking his
daily
dosage of synthetic blood to control his
hunger, but
keeps the info to himself. They’re glad to
see each
even though he thinks Jude is faking it. He
summons
the Bay City Vampires, a gay vampire gang
which he’s
the leader. They wish Jude a happy
birthday. He lets the
gang know he might need their help on
something he’s
working on. He does this secretly to not
let his brother
know that he’s a cop again.
Conflict: Jude’s boss calls him and
needs him to work. He invites
his brother
and the gang along.
9 - POV: Le Fey Torran
Goal:
become owner of the blue Witch
Motive: he does this knowing Jude is an employee
Conflict:
10 -POV: Dillon
Goal: he
lies down for a nap, but can’t sleep. So he changes clothes
which are jeans and motorcycle jacket, gets
on his Harley and
drives away.
Motive: he winds up at the Blue Witch, a gay bar, where mortals and
vampires hang out
Conflict: hoping to have a peaceful time he gets in an
argument with
the tallest vampire he’s ever seen and
gets punched in the face.
the impact is so strong his body lifts off
the floor and flies
toward the ceiling.
10 - POV: Talon
Goal: to go with Jude where
his work
Motive: to try to enjoy himself
Conflict: he sees Dillon falling and manages to catch
him. There’s a
sexual attraction between them, but he’s
disappointed
when Dillon’s interest in him changes
whenever he
sees that talon is a vampire.
11 - POV: Dillon
Goal: Tries
going to sleep, but he can’t keep his mind off
Talon and winds up dreaming about him. A
phone call
awakens him. It’s his bod wanting a
meeting with him
that night.
12 - POV:
Talon
Goal: to return to his brother’s house
Motive: debates on going to sleep earlier than
usual
Conflict: but that’s interrupted by the Portland PD police chief
who wants a meeting with him that nigjt.
12 - PLOT POINT 2
POV:
Dillon
Goal: to find out what the meeting is about
Motive:
Conflict: when the captain introduces him to his new
partner – Talon
He and Talon are surprised since neither
new they are cops.
Talon doesn’t like the idea of having a
partner, but he’s forced
into having one. If he refuses he’ll
relinquish the reward money
for catching the cop killer.
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